Damage environment and life style

Dear Feras,

Your posts really make me keep reading and contributing into the Blog. Wish you every success in your mission to defeat the ILETS monster. As a result, i feel myself encouraged to enlarge your experience in writing by adding some comments as (green) colored:

Dear Colleagues


When any one read this subject, first question jumps to his mind did ( I think "DOES" is the right word as it indicates the present time and it is simple present verb that illustrates the time you are talking about is continuous. sure our life has not ended yet. The use of the verb "DID" indicates that our life has started and then ended) our life style destroy or cause damage to our lovely plant environment?, and if yes haw (how) this will happen and what we can do to reduce this influence on our earth.? ( you have to use the question mark because you are asking a question here and trying to give the answer in your essay)


One team he agrees ( the word "TEAM" indicates a group of people and for many people you have to use the verb "agree" without "S") that the speedy world we live in and the luxury life style some of us live with is causing many bad influence on environment, while other team believes that the modern style of our life serves the people in a way could cover the damage caused to environment.

In this few rows I will not take the position to defend one opinion against the other but I will bring some evidence shows that both teams has (have, because you have mentioned two teams not one) their vision. I think that our current life style caused many problems to the environment, for example we enjoy riding cars, flight by airplans, to save our time and efforts, and we are using several disposable items on a daily basis, like plastic cups and dishes, plastic pages etc. All this items caused bad influence on our environment. Vise versa our speedy life force us to depend on this item to cover our needs.
When you finish your introduction you should start a new paragraph in a new line, so the sentence " I think that our current life style...........item to cover our needs" should be below your introduction " ....their vision".

THE ABOVE INTRODUCTION IS WONDERFUL, BUT TOO LONG. YOU SHOULD MAKE IT SHORTER AND DIRECTLY INTO THE SUBJECT. YOU SHOULD MAKE IT TWO TO THREE ROWS 30 WORDS APPROXIMATLY.
However, there are some acts can reduce this bad influence on the enviroment by using public transporation instead of our own cars , replace the plastic bags with those made from paper, reduce the use of electronic items like air conditioning.

In conclusion, that advantages and disadvantages for our present life style is almost equal and the whole story depend on balancing our needs with our earth needs to live in a safe and healthy environment.

Regards,

Feras


TRY TO USE THE RIGHT PUNCTUATION.


ALL THE BEST

Captain"Tony",
what do you think? needs two paragraphs with more words and sentences.